LOST

Wordle 24, for The Sunday Whirl, http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com/, is a creation of the fertile mind of Leo, http://1mind2worlds.blogspot.com/. He gave us the twelve-word prompt of: adventure, fearful, signs, face, cobbled, myriad, lost, alone, concrete, remember, church, and circle.

This turned to be one of those poems where I immediately knew where it was going; then, it refused to go there. About a third of the way through, “Meet the parents,” popped into my head, requiring a total rewrite. The only line to remain unchanged was the first one.

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LOST
by Mike Patrick

There are a myriad reasons for him to be lost.
She will understand that.
“Meet the parents,” she said.
“I’ll be there a little later,” she said.

His first trip to her parent’s house,
and she wants him to face them alone?
Sure. What could go wrong?
Her harpy mom and fearful dad:
the couple from Hell.

Well, this is an adventure
he would rather share with her.
He remembered her directions,
followed the signs,
turned off the concrete
and onto the cobbled street.
Straight ahead . . .
the third house past the church.

For the sixth time, he circled the block.
She will understand him being lost.
She wouldn’t expect him to stop and ask directions;
after all, a man has his pride.

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13 Responses to LOST

  1. Mike, I had not tackled the Wordle yet – but this was the perfect spin. The words seem to point in a specific direction, and you toppled it like a pile of Pick-Up Sticks!! Loved this! Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/10/02/absinthe-3ww/

  2. nan says:

    Very interesting poem. I loved the ending…

  3. LOL … A man never stops and asks for directions… hehe..Nice spin on the prompt.! RYN: Thanks for the lovely comment and compliment.

  4. Susannah says:

    You managed to use the wordle words and make me smile! Nicely done. 🙂

  5. Irene says:

    Oh what fun, you did give a new twist to “lost”!

  6. Nanka says:

    LOL!! that was great fun and you tangled the wordle words so well, as only you can do!! Very clever maneuvers!! I was so lost as to what was going to happen next that I didn’t even want to know where the words were!! 😀 Fantastic!!
    I have a strange feeling that he was chicken and took all those endless detours!! 😉

    Thank you for your comment on mine!! 🙂

  7. brenda w says:

    LoL Wonderful write, Mike! We know you men won’t stop to ask for directions, so you turn it on us as an excuse. Clever, devious even…I love it. ha! But REALLY? You meet them without me? She set herself up for that one.

  8. magicalmysticalteacher says:

    I’m so glad he found a way not to go meet the harpy parents! 🙂

    My Wordle 24

  9. Mike says:

    A great poem Mike. You made excellent use of this set of wordle words.
    Of course he can’t ask for directions, that he something us men just don’t do!
    I also think that being lost is probably safer.

  10. 1sojournal says:

    What fun and so glad that you just sort of stumbled on those few words that led to this one. Love sitting back and watching you take chances. Sometimes not asking for directions is the beginning of one excellent adventure. Thanks Mike,

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/

  11. Mr. Walker says:

    Mike, what a great first line. When you go back and read the poem again, its poignancy hits you. I was worried about him at the beginning, but at the end, I knew he’d made the right choice to be “lost”.

    Richard

    • Mike Patrick says:

      Better lost than entering the lion’s den. Thank you, Richard. I’ve been so busy reading and studying poetry, I’ve neglected visiting my friends, haven’t even taken the time to look up the poems from the list for you class. Off to do that now.

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