ROSE CAPPED HILLS

Prompt #122, for Carry On Tuesday, http://carryontuesdayprompt.blogspot.com/, was taken from the opening or a poem by Crystallynn Barringer, “When I look into your eyes.”

One of my first attempts at free verse started with just such a line. In its original form, it was acceptable perhaps, but I’ve never looked at an old poem without wanting to update it. This is the updated version. Only a couple of lines escaped editing.

ROSE CAPPED HILLS
by Mike Patrick

Flickr image by John Tones

I look into your eyes
and feel myself falling
soft and slow.
An Alice-type wonderland
stretches before me.
I caress sun-tanned meadows
and climb rose capped hills
as fantasies come alive.
You are the only character,
whispering in my ear
as I spin in place.
No secrets live here.
As light dims,
I seek the place where my eyes
can look into your soul,
and find yours looking into mine.
This dream has no end.
As the light flares again,
you’re still here.

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8 Responses to ROSE CAPPED HILLS

  1. fantastic…smart use of the prompt.

  2. Wow, for a first, this is actually very nice Mike. Contratulations

  3. viv blake says:

    I like your free verse romantic mode, Mike.

  4. Beautiful Mike. I love these lines “I caress sun-tanned meadows, and climb rose capped hills”. Well done 🙂

  5. Nanka says:

    Something soft and romantic in this poem and one gets the feel right from the Title on wards!!

  6. geri-Mom says:

    What a beautiful love story. Is the orignial poem on an earlier post?

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