Temporary

Kellie at http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2011/08/03/haiku-story-writing-challenge/ offers a challenge of writing a haiku starting with the line, “Once upon a time.” Looking at my yard makes a seasonal haiku appealing. It rained yesterday, giving another short break from the high temperatures, but using “Once upon a time,” didn’t allow enough room for a meaningful haiku. This will have to do.

Temporary
by Mike Patrick

Midsummer rain falls
returns the dry grass to green
Temporary joy

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8 Responses to Temporary

  1. Lovely – much better than my moaning! Do you need the punctuation? – the line breaks are generally sufficient in a haiku.

    • Mike Patrick says:

      Force of habit. I’ll see how it looks without them.

      • pmwanken says:

        Not that I have any real haiku prowess to stand on, but I find there are times when I want to be sure two of the lines tie together and the third stands on its own. In that case, I’ve used the ~ at the end of whichever line needs it. For example:

        just like an eclipse
        my radiance is darkened ~
        and this too shall pass

        And…by the way….what IS a midsummer rainfall?! For that matter, what is MIDsummer!? 😉 It seems this year summer will never end in South Texas!!

        Lovely haiku, Mike.

  2. TheMsLvh says:

    It looks and sounds great! Midsummer – Temporary joy. fabulous

  3. Tilly Bud says:

    That’s lovely, Mike. You have a real gift for haiku.

  4. adeeyoyo says:

    Very, very nice, Mike.

  5. Mary says:

    Beautiful completion, Mike! Write on.

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