Wednesday’s poetic prompt for Poetic Asides,, was to write an “Empty” poem. I hadn’t done any free verse for a while, so I let “empty’ lead the way.

by Mike Patrick

Empty room

Flickr image by Passive Income

Echoes rattle in this old room.
It used to hold so much;
it’s empty now.

The bed was over there;
not much of a bed,
it sagged in the middle
and threw us together.
That’s probably why the boys were born.

That wall was always covered with pictures:
first of us, then the kids and finally the grandkids.
The nail holes and marks from the frames are still there.

The dresser sat there,
her jewelry box on top.
She called it her jewelry box
but mostly it held memories:
cards from the children
and a couple of pressed roses.

The room is empty now.
Nothing left to hold me
but the memories.
In the echoes, I hear her voice.

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7 Responses to ECHOES

  1. You are good at this, Mike – painting a complete picture in few words.

  2. TheMsLvh says:

    Excellent Mike! The flow was good and the images very clear. Great job! Darn, you are so good!

  3. earlybird says:

    oh! this is good, Mike. A bit desolate, but good.

  4. margo roby says:

    I like this very much. I wandered by looking for a specific post and found this. I am so glad I did. The punctuation is used masterfully, as are your choices of line breaks to build up to that ending. And, best of all: form = content, the poet’s aim.

  5. Susannah says:

    Really nice, it sets a scene, paints a picture, and leaves the reader with a feeling of having ‘been there’.

  6. wordcoaster says:

    Nothing empty about this poem–so full of vivid imagery and insight. Love the aside about the bed 🙂

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