Idol thoughts are the devil’s playground. I was thinking of a friend’s situation when these words appeared unbidden. As harsh as their message, it was pleasant write something without a prompt—or was my friends plight a prompt?

by Mike Patrick

O yearning lips,
why do you dream?
That beyond your reach
is sweeter for the longing.

O piercing eyes,
what depth do you reveal?
Your blindness finds the truth,
and still you do not see.

O grasping fingers,
can touch fulfill your need?
The phantom, which you hold,
lives only in the past.

O troubled heart,
how long ‘til you concede?
Your bygone throb
has barely kept the dream alive.

The nourishment the soul now seeks,
insanity controls.
Reality comes with a cost.
The price one pays: “Goodbye.”

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11 Responses to GOODBYE

  1. TheMsLvh says:

    ok, I really liked this one too! So much said within and between the lines. Great poem! Like it so much I read it twice!

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  3. Awwwww Reminds me of the expression: ‘Tis better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.’
    Bitter sweet and lovely even for its, goodbye.

  4. Ravenblack says:

    I think everything is a prompt if you let it. 🙂 Interesting poem. I used to have a friend like that I think, unfortunately, she did not let go of that which she cannot have and thus she lost many friends for her terrible desperate actions.

  5. pmwanken says:

    O troubled heart,
    how long ‘til you concede?

    …Mike, you’re a master with words…

  6. Jingle says:

    very cool perspective,
    Glad to see you in.

    Happy Rally.

  7. Joel Hall says:

    Thought provoking. Makes you peek around the corner of your own assumptions to find meanings implied between the lines. 🙂

  8. Awesomely done you’ve really captured your friend’s desperation and torment

  9. Mandy Calvin says:

    Not to be lightly read. This is an intriguing view into the emotions of your friend.

  10. That’s excellent!

    And thanks so much for participating in last week’s Limerick-Off! I just posted a new one and hope to see you there. 🙂

    Mad Kane

  11. J Sirrah says:


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