I’ve lurked and watched Mad Kane’s Humor Blog for months, laughing at and enjoying the limericks. I’ve held out as long as I can. It’s time to join the fun. This is my first real attempt at a limerick. Be gentle with me.

by Mike Patrick

A woman was playing with fire.
She kept her man hot with desire,
until he went wild,
and now she’s with child.
She’s facing an outlook so dire.

by Mike Patrick

A fellow was playing with fire
while camping out deep in the brier.
The wind started to blow
and what do you know?
His tent has turned into a pyre.

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11 Responses to TOO HOT

  1. vivinfrance says:

    Hooray, Mike. Now we’ll see some fun, now you’ve joined in.

  2. Kim Nelson says:

    Pretty darn good for a novice. That first one is ready for prime time!

  3. beespoetry says:

    Both are great! The second one made me giggle a bit, though I shouldn’t laugh at the probable forest fire that’d happen from that.

  4. I’m so glad you joined in with these and am looking forward to more from you. 🙂 Hard to believe you’ve never written limericks before.

    I hope you’ll become one of my Limerick-Off regulars!

  5. I hope you don’t mind my suggesting a rhyme tweak on the first one: replacing “by the hour” with “with desire.”

    • Mike Patrick says:

      Oh yeah. Much better. Please feel free to make suggestions. This one doesn’t change the meter, but the meaning fits much better. Looks like it will take me some time to develop a limerick ear. I knew it wouldn’t be as easy as it looked.

  6. earlybird says:

    FAB! Well done, Mike!

  7. naramalone says:

    Laughing. I think they’re perfect.

  8. pmwanken says:

    Mike…jolly good!! And you inspired me to give it a go, too. Tried my hand at a limerick for today’s Carry On Tuesday prompt! Yikes! 🙂 ~Paula

  9. Susan says:

    I’ve smiled only at the beauty of poetical lines. But I loved and laughed so much after reading these two poems esp, the first one. I can’t believe this is your first attempt. Thank you. I enjoyed reading them so much.

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