Poetic Asides http://blog.writersdigest.com/poeticasides/ prompt for day five was to either write a goofy poem or a serious poem—or perhaps a seriously goofy poem. As we all know, Seriously goofy is an oxymoron, and that falls right in line with the NaPoWriMo prompt. I went serious.

NaPoWriMo http://www.napowrimo.net/ came up with a way for each writer to have a unique prompt for day five. They placed a link http://www.writingfix.com/right_brain/Serendipitous_Oxymorons1.htm, to The Serendipitous Oxymoron Maker created by Teacher Consultants Corbett Harrison, Phil Harriman, and Dena Robinson. The Serendipitous Oxymoron Maker selects randomly generated positive or negative adjective and places it with the opposite value noun. Oxymorons have always appeared in poetry: Shakespeare placed them to good use (Parting is such sweet sorrow).

I love this Serendipitous Oxymoron Maker and immediately bookmarked it. The very first time I used it, it gave me “Sunny Devastation” and “Cruel Perfection.” How neat are they?

For some reason, Linsay Lohan was my mental model as I wrote this. This is supposed to be a photo of her.

by Mike Patrick

Photo of Lindsay Lohan

Flickr photo by Blogpix

Other women hated her in her youth,
her cruel perfection made them look so plain.
Her life was one of a flawless skin and tans;
perfect body, hair and clothes;
but she dined alone.

Her whole life, beauty worked against her.
Men knew they could not approach such beauty,
they feared rejection, so they admired from afar,
and she dined alone.

The hundreds of hours of
working out and lying in the sun
began to take their toll.
Aging happens and a sunny devastation
dried out the perfect beauty.
Wrinkles marred the perfect face,
blotches appeared on the perfect skin,
and she dined alone.

Now, as an old woman, sitting in the shade
overlooking the beach, sadly remembering
her youth and her once perfect beauty,
she dines alone.

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9 Responses to MISS PERFECT

  1. Love that phrase ‘sunny devastation’.

  2. Becca Givens says:

    What a valuable lesson within, Mike. Great job with the new tool. I discovered it this morning, but have not tried it yet.

    For such delights within your blog, I have an award for you at http://beccagivens.wordpress.com/2011/04/05/creative-blog-award/

  3. vivinfrance says:

    I suspect that you are right, which is a pity. Beauty should be shared, not wasted in solitude.

  4. Tilly Bud says:

    The reps work perfectly to emphasise a sad life.

  5. Ron. says:

    Clearly she was deeply superficial.
    It’s the First Noble Truth, the Dharma Of Impermanence. Youth, beauty, fame, wealth; do not cling to it. Nothing lasts.

    You capture this well. Salute.

  6. andy sewina says:

    A sad tale, well thought through. I like those oxymorans!

  7. lunawitch15 says:

    what a sad life. To always be dining alone.

  8. trisha says:

    this was touching, a truth. this is why i sometimes feel very sad for celebrities- they pay the price of all the adoration and wealth they earn.

  9. Chloe says:

    Love the repetitions used – they really work well. I read this poem and thought of Elizabeth Taylor.

    Love these words of yours: “Aging happens and a sunny devastation dried out the perfect beauty.”

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