IS SHE STILL THERE?

The Cloaked Monk’s, http://cloakedmonk.com/, MarchChallenge prompt for the 27th is, “Uncertainty.”

When one sees references to mind maps in some poet’s posts, I fear there are some who don’t know exactly what they are. A mind map is a written form to make visual relationships and associations of words in one’s head. Every person’s mind map is unique because it is built on one’s life experiences. They are useful in organizing thoughts, so they often prove to be handy in poetry. A mind map can generate a list of words to be used much like a wordle. I thought today might be a good day to show what a mind map looks like—at least one that I generated on the FreeMind software. I use FreeMind because, unlike my handwritten maps, I can actually read them.

IS SHE STILL THERE?
by Mike Patrick

A honeymoon adventure,
Las Vegas for a week,
was supposed to be a good time
of love and deep mystique.

The first night was a dream,
Their love they did explore.
Somehow the day began
upon the gaming floor.

The spinning wheels of slot machines
attracted for awhile,
winning a little money
brought them a happy smile.

And when another night so softly called
her toward the marriage bed,
he wanted one more hand,
no matter how she plead.

In silence and in anger
she went to bed alone,
as he just kept on playing
to the addiction he had grown.

For two days he played tables,
until their savings were all lost.
It took the final card’s quick turn,
to realize the cost.

Would his bride still be waiting
in the room for which they paid,
or would he sleep alone
upon the bed that he’d just made.

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13 Responses to IS SHE STILL THERE?

  1. Tilly Bud says:

    I hope it was the latter!

  2. Pretty Good!!! A sad story but good nonetheless. The mind map is good and it’s a neat idea all by itself. I’ll have to make my own mind map,but then that’s what you were probably trying to show us…. Thanks again.

  3. honeyhaiku says:

    Well played Mike, I like the “gambling” with the chips and hearts in the poem.

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  5. Becca Givens says:

    Thank you for showing the mind map with your ideas, and the “story” which evolved from it … appreciate you sharing ~

    Have to get use to your new blog format – still expecting the other colored background – I initially am startled by the white. 😉

  6. Jingle says:

    love the graph.
    deep thoughts, well done.
    🙂

  7. earlybird says:

    After your mentioning it in a previous post, I downloaded FreeMind because I make them alot, but I haven’t yet had a chance to get to grips with it so it was great to see yours. Good poem!

  8. vivinfrance says:

    Your mind-map process led to a terrific story-poem. I admire the way you did that! Where can I find that software, to have a go? Your allusion to the difficulty of reading your own handwriting made me laugh.
    ViV

  9. Sad and very expressive one….

  10. trisha says:

    superb mike, just superb. hope he sleeps alone for atleast a while, till the time he quits gambling.

    trisha
    http://sharmishthabasu.wordpress.com/2011/03/16/uncertainty/

  11. Delightful poem with an excellent punchline!

  12. dani says:

    i don’t think i dare to do a mind map ~ chances are too great that the mind is gone. {giggle} great poem. hope she left him.

  13. tigerbrite says:

    Thanks for a great poem and the mind map, a concept I have not seen before.

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