The Cloaked Monk’s,, MarchChallenge prompt for the 19th is, “Clean.”

Oddly enough, I didn’t have to think about this one.

by Mike Patrick

For the last time,
the key fits in the balky lock.
The door rattles as it opens;
for the last time I take stock.

The raincoat and reflective vest
will have to be turned in,
along with the uniform
I’ll never need again.

The briefcase is mostly junk
after the abuse of twenty years.
The young guys always laughed at it,
but now I hold back tears.

I’m glad at least to be rid
of that stupid clip-on tie,
but what about all the friends
who wait to say goodbye.

No one said it’s easy
to retire from what you do,
but leaving from an injury
before my time was due?

The last thing is a coffee cup,
the department’s Christmas gift.
A fitting tribute to hold aloft
as I end my final shift.

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  1. Jingle says:

    superb cleaning piece.
    the image is perfect looking..

    way to go.

  2. tigerbrite says:

    Beautifully expressive. Something I remember only too well. My last day as an air hostess after too many years I care to remember. The uniform I will never need again.

  3. honeyhaiku says:

    Mike, this a very moving piece. My hair is on end from the plainly wrought emotion displayed here.

  4. lunawitch15 says:

    that struck a deep cord.

  5. lunawitch15 says:

    may I put your blog on my facebook page?
    it’s for poets and their blogs…


  6. Becca Givens says:

    Awesome expression of emotion, Mike! Bittersweet reflection ~


  7. earlybird says:

    ouch. Good take on the subject. The last two verses left me feeling distinctly sad.

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  9. vivinfrance says:

    Mike, Cleaning is a horrid task at the best of times, but I hadn’t thought of it as sad until I read your beautifully written poem.

  10. dani says:

    it sounds like you loved your job ~ if you love what you’re doing, you do it well.

  11. Tilly Bud says:

    That’s so sad…

  12. Renee says:

    Thanks so much! You tell what many feel about some of
    life’s events and say it so well.

  13. trisha says:

    beautiful mike. you painted the really sad picture of farewell.

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