The Cloked Monk’s March Challenge, day 8.

The http://cloakedmonk.com/ prompt for day 8 is “Abundance.”

I went to bed last night still drawing a blank on this prompt. I marinated in weird dreams, and I woke up a very different take on abundance.

It’s not easy to make abundance a negative. I’m not sure what this says about me.

ABUNDANCE
by Mike Patrick

Flickr image by One Lucky Guy

From the days of man’s beginning
he was woefully unprepared
To defend his tiny family,
So vulnerable and so scared.

But mankind’s brain is fertile,
So he found a way to stand.
From sharpened stone — a weapon,
That fit nicely in the hand.

Twas the beginnings of a process,
to defeat that which was feared.
From such a rudimentary genesis,
the humble sword was engineered.

Improvements progressed,
from rocks to brass and gold,
and finally on to iron and steel,
in desperate patterns uncontrolled.

Curved and straight, short and long,
from dirk to scimitar,
the abundant ways to kill and maim
grew better by the hour.

Broadsword, greatsword, longsword:
Each, in time, made its debut.
The Roman gladius, and the saber
cleaved destructive paths anew.

A thousand types of bayonets,
when added to the gun,
increased the carnage many-fold,
and oft the battle won.

Never has been known a time,
without the vicious will,
to produce more abundantly,
better ways to kill.

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16 Responses to The Cloked Monk’s March Challenge, day 8.

  1. ladynimue says:

    Twas the beginnings of a process,
    to defeat that which was feared.

    This indeed is still the beginning of most violence ! And the closing lines are just perfect !!
    Prompt or not , this is one hell of a poem from you Mike !! Amazing !

  2. Margaret says:

    This is absolutely splendid! Wow. And sadly, so very true. Me thinks you should go to sleep every night with the word challenge on your mind!

  3. The folly of mankind, to create to destroy! Man can percieve the need for power over the disagreeable and overcome bounds to take it, but, it changes hands much. Peace will always be shared for those who can hold it.

  4. Pat Cegan says:

    Good for you, Mike! One can not run from fear, nor drive a sword through it, or drop a bomb on it. It is only when we stand tall and call it by its name can we gain power over it, forever releasing ourselves from its cruel grip. Great poem! hugs, pat

  5. honeyhaiku says:

    Wow, Mike this is exquisite! I love th rhythm here and of course the context however dark it may be. Poetry at it’s finest!

  6. vivinfrance says:

    As a topic, weapons are abhorrent, but your skill as a poet turned this around, to a splendid last stanza.
    Thank you for making me think about this in a different way.

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  8. RJ Clarken says:

    This really was quite a different take on ‘abundance’ but no less a statement. I think you did a brilliant job of it – and I only wish it weren’t so. Perhaps a cautionary tale, then? Anyway, well penned.

  9. Becca Givens says:

    OMG – Mike … see what awesome words evolve when you prompt yourself to ponder upon it in your dreams! Great poem for the prompt! ~becca

  10. Jingle says:

    there are many deceptions or tricks in life, it takes courage to survive or get over them…
    lovely words.
    Happy Wednesday.

  11. cloakedmonk says:

    Wonderful! Man’s ability to be cruel knows no bound. The very kernel of abundance. A wonderful social commentary.

  12. Reflections says:

    Wow!!! ‘Twas the beginnings of a process,
    to defeat that which was feared.’

    Profound piece… so much depth, so much negative, yet strived for endlessly. Great write.

  13. Tilly Bud says:

    Great take on the prompt. Sometimes you really can have too much of a good thing.

  14. vivinfrance says:

    I could have sworn I commented on this last night. I have a horror or war and weapons, even though I can see that many are things of beauty. But I have to applaud your beautifully written poem, specially the last stanza.

  15. trisha says:

    this is an energy which surprises me too, man’s eagerness to create weapons of destruction. really! it sometimes infuriates me to no end!

  16. earlybird says:

    excellent comment and an original take on abundance.

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